Advantages for Foreign Students by Living with American Family

OUTLINE

1.      Topic Sentence            : Living with an American family has three advantages for foreign   students.

2.      Topic                           : Living with an American family.

3.      Controlling idea            : Has three advantages for foreign students.

4.      Supporting details:

v  Major supporting sentence 1:

We can learn American culture.

·         Minor supporting sentence:

Ø  We know the American style in clothing.

Ø  Learn American style in daily activity.

Ø  We have an experience to become an American.

v  Major supporting sentence 2:

By living with American family we can improve our language skills especially English.

·         Minor supporting sentence:

Ø  Train our speaking with native speaker.

Ø  Learn new vocabulary.

Ø  We know the correct grammar.

Ø  We can improve our listening by listening native speakers when they speak.

v  Major supporting sentence 3:

By living with American family we will not feel lonely.

·         Minor supporting sentence:

Ø  We have friends to speak with.

Ø  Share our problems that we got with that American family.

Ø  We can decrease our homesick.

5.      Concluding sentence   :

In short, by living with American family for foreign students, the advantages are we can learn culture understanding, improve our language skills, and also we are not felling lonely.

 By:

I Gede Wahyu Widiyatmika Putra     (1212021041)

Made Arirni Purnamasari                  (1212021051)

I Gede Bagus Wisnu Bayu Temaja    (1212021113)

Writing Final Assignment

Advantages for Foreign Students by Living with American Family

Living with an American family has three advantages for foreign students. First, we can learn American culture. American culture is just like American style in clothing, so we learn their clothing everyday. American culture that we learn is not only American style in clothing, but we can learn their culture style in daily activity as well. Second, by living with American family we can improve our language skills especially English. We train our speaking skill with native speaker of English. We learn new vocabulary based on what we hear from native speaker. We know the correct grammar of English. We can listen clearly when we speak with native speaker so that it will train our listening. Third, by living with American family we will not feel lonely. We have friends to speak with us when we are not in the college. We can share our problems that we got with that American family. We can decrease our homesick with our family, friends, hometown, and country. In short, by living with American family for foreign students, the advantages are we can learn culture understanding, improve our language skills, and also we are not felling lonely.




By : I Gede Bagus Wisnu Bayu Temaja    (1212021113)

Source : http://www.academicyear.org/inbound/

The 8th Classroom in EED

The 8^th Classroom in EED

The 8^th classroom is one of classrooms in EED. But, the condition of this classroom is not like the other classrooms in EED. Many facilities in this room are broken or not work properly, so some facilities that supposed to support the learning process had turned to be a problem instead. Broken chairs pilled in the back of the class and make the class untidy. Many windows are broken. Some cannot we open and some other cannot be closed. The curtains are dirty and out of order. The walls are dirty with meaningless drawing, writings and stains. The plugs on the floor are not working, so we cannot use it like how it supposed to, such as for charging our laptop or other things that need plugs. The ACs in the class are not working, one of them even become a place for bird to make nest. There are some leaks from the roof so when it rains, it will make some water stagnant on the floor. Also, the door is jammed and we cannot open it sometimes if the door closed. Beside those conditions of broken facilities, the class can be so noisy. On the other side of the building where the class is located there is a busy road, so we usually can hear the sound of vehicles moving very clearly and it disturbs our study process especially when we need to listen to an important lecture. Then, there are many benches outside the 8^th class where some students usually wait for their classes and the sound of their chatting sometimes are very loud. Another problem outside of the class is that it is so crowded and it also disturbs our focus when studying. The reason why it is very crowded no other because the 8^th class is near a space, a place where students usually wait for their classes; so many students usually flock around there. It is also near the toilets and HMJ room. In short, broken facilities, noises around the class and the crowded outside the class are the causes that make us feel very disturbed during our lessons. If there is no action to improve the class condition, we afraid it will affects our study performance. The students’ spirit will decrease and it will impact to the quality of every students.

Outline

       I.            Title                             : Free Hugs

    II.            Topic Sentence            : The man with the sign “free hugs”.

 III.            Major supporting sentence and minor supporting sentence:

I am very confused to distinguish each sentence because each of sentences is quite long sentences. But, I will try to distinguish it.

For the first paragraph, the topic sentence is:

After I watched the video, first I thought the man with the sign “free hugs”, was a guy or someone who needed a love and affection so that he wanted to share free hugs to everybody who he met and I thought probably in his mind, he thought to foster a sense of togetherness and peace among other people although they didn’t know each other before, so he did it by giving free hugs to everyone he met.

The major supporting sentence for the first paragraph is:

Second, I also thought he was a nice and tough guy because he was not easily to give up and not easily to desperate we can see that the man keep patience and passion to get a hug even though initially no one wanted to hug him and he also tried to keep his smile and keep friendly to everyone who saw him although other people who saw him felt he was weird.

The minor supporting sentence for the first paragraph is:

Initially the atmosphere was like black and white, because no one was care about what is done by the man other than that, the people who saw him also laughed at her, because maybe they thought what he did was a strange thing and at first, the people also did not respond to him and the people did not want to be hugged by him and did not want to give a hug to the man, because people might think that he was weird and crazy because he brought the sign "free hugs" while walking in the crowd and people might think what is done by the man is a strange thing to do or not reasonable.

This is the topic sentence in the second paragraph:

After that, the atmosphere changed became more colorful because after the man walked in a long time then, the man met with a grandmother and the man greeted the grandmother next, they hugged each other at that time they looked loving each other and they looked happy when they shared a hug, that’s way the free hugs happened and then, Police banned the man to do free hugs third, I thought the police forbade him because he did free hugs in public places and the people who followed what is done by the man to perform free hugs increasing number so that, the police might think that what the man did could disturb the public or people as more and more people followed the man action then, this would make the crowd which could interfered the public so that the police forbid it, maybe the police did not know what the purpose of his free hugs did.

This is the minor supporting sentence in the second paragraph:

Other than that, free hugs action which performed by the man and the people included an illegal action because they had not obtained permission to do so.

This is the topic sentence in the third paragraph:

Next when the police tried to stop free hugs campaign action, then the man and those who supported free hugs action tried to do petition by collecting signatures as a sign permit application to do free hugs campaign after that, the police asked the man and the people who supported the man to collect the signature a number of 10,000 signatures to get permission to perform action such free hugs. The target of the signatures were 10,000 signatures, at first they got 83, then 136, next 572 signatures, 1850, 2134, after that 5395 signatures, then 7840 signatures until they could reach their target to get 10,000 signatures, so they got permission to do free hugs campaign.

I think, it is independent sentence below because there is no relation between this sentence and the first sentence in the third paragraph. So, this sentence can be separate from the third paragraph and forms a new paragraph.

In the end the man and the people got permission to do free hugs campaign finally all of the people were happy included the police and they shared their hugs with each other. The main point of this video, it showed us about how to make a peaceful among others people although we didn’t know each other people yet just by doing a little or simple thing such as by sharing a hug and the video also taught us to respect each other, appreciate the difference so then by sharing free hugs could create togetherness.

 IV.            Concluding Sentence

The concluding sentence is “The main point of this video, it showed us about how to make a peaceful among others people although we didn’t know each other people yet just by doing a little or simple thing such as by sharing a hug and the video also taught us to respect each other, appreciate the difference so then by sharing free hugs could create togetherness.”

    V.            Grammar

There are some mistakes about the grammar.

In this part “first I thought the man with the sign “free hugs”, was a guy” from that part it need to put comma after “first” and remove comma before “was”. So I will become “first, I thought the man with the sign “free hugs” was a guy”.

 VI.            Vocabulary

After I read it many times, the vocabulary is good.

VII.            Mechanic

The mechanic of each paragraph is quite good. I am a bit confused to distinguish between major and minor supporting paragraph because one sentence same with five sentences. You preferred to use conjunctions to bridge each paragraph, but it is better for you to use full stop where it is needed. So, it will not make the reader confused. Also, the third paragraph contains 2 topic sentences, so that it is better for you to make a new paragraph from this sentence “In the end the man and the people got permission to do free hugs campaign finally all of the people were happy included the police and they shared their hugs with each other. The main point of this video, it showed us about how to make a peaceful among others people although we didn’t know each other people yet just by doing a little or simple thing such as by sharing a hug and the video also taught us to respect each other, appreciate the difference so then by sharing free hugs could create togetherness.”

 

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